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Ja Ne, May.

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Don't do it.


Scattered, while it seems to be real,
you know it to be as it is--
heart rendering,
an inevitable torment,
a love unsound,
unsatisfactory,
unloved.

Do you feel, or do you weep?
For weeping is a tragedy,
a love unsound,
foreseen by the sadness.

You grieve…don't you?
Don't we?
From one you, to the other you.
© 2011 - 2024 TorrenKlaimer
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Supernurva
I really like this. I like how you start the first stanza with a lengthy, wordy phrase and then move towards harder-hitting more syllabic words.
The rehtorical questions in the second stanza and final line are also nicely effective. Like it :)